"Lobsters"

In our discussion last week we talked about the poem "Lobsters". Everybody had good ideas and opinions to contribute to it. One idea that someone shared that really stood out to me was that in the store in the lobster tank the lobsters were sleep walking all over each other and seeing another one of themselves because they all look somewhat alike.
 
when  we look at them we cant truly tell them apart. They look the same and that's the same with them too. If they were looking into a tank at us, they wouldn't be able to tell us apart eather. This relates to us in the way that  some people have to pay extra attention to notice little details about others  and the number one thing we all know about the most, is ourselves.

So Many Paragraphs So Many Skills

 Listening to everyone's perspectives through their writing in their five part  paragraphs was very interesting. I got to hear new, fresh, ideas on the topics that I hadn't thought of myself.  Over all, the paragraphs people wrote were great, but still, mistakes were made. Some of the most common ones were the sentences around concrete details weren't embedded, there were proofreading errors, lack of transition words, and citations of the page numbers. Some people had too much commentary, or not enough to go with the concrete details and the rest of their paragraphs. There were proof reading errors like "I think" or "in my opinion"If somebody proofread, they would have taken them out. Some people also had no transition words.They just rushed into the next point with no warning, and page number citation was also a big error. They were eather absent, or not cited correctly.

 I think I did a pretty good Job on my paragraph, but some things I could work on for the next five part paragraph assignment, are remembering to add a little more commentary to places needed, and finding ways to say some points better and more detailed. Now that i have done a five part paragraph,and  have experience with writing them,  I am more prepared for when the next assignment comes around. I don't think it will be as difficult now that  I know what I can improve on to make it even better.